Reply To: Anyone feel up for some editing?

[Stan]

Ginger are you still interested in suggestions from the peanut gallery about ways of tightening this story? What I’ve seen that I would edit if it were my story are the occasional redundancy and an over abundance of prepositions. It appears you’re contemplating a deeper level of editing though.
This is a good and I think important story that I hope you don’t abandon. You touch on so many important things from the horrible early life of Michael to the dangers of being connected that I for one would like to see it known to a much wider audience than it has here.

I realise that you probably aren’t too keen on working with someone you don’t know and I won’t be free to do much for a couple of weeks anyway and even then, I’ll have less than one spare week until September.

What I’m trying to get across is that this story is more than just a good read or a fun, sexy, little story.
Stan