A few minutes later, Lena sat topless on a barstool in front of the bathroom mirror with a towel draped over her shoulders. Daniel stood behind her, a pair of dull kitchen scissors in his hand, looking far more focused than she’d ever seen him.
“This feels like a bad idea,” she said.
“It’s going to be fine,” he replied. “Just hold still.”
Daniel gathered her hair into a low ponytail at the nape of her neck.
“That’s really high, I don’t think I could handle anything shorter than shoulder length” she said as she reached back to lower the hair tie to the just below the base of her neck.
“Lena, your hair’s still going to tangle in the necklace at shoulder length, we need to at least go above the necklace,” he explained, as he slid the scissors in against her neck, just above where the necklace rested.
“Daniel… that feels really-“
The snip was louder than she expected.
The right side of the ponytail fell forward, the short strands falling just below her chin.
“Oh my god,” Lena said, reaching back instinctively. “Is it-?”
“Hold on. Stay still, if you want this to be even ” he said, as he pushed the dull scissors through the remainder of her thick ponytail.
She looked into the mirror, eyes wide, reaching up to feel the uneven ends falling around her face, brushing around her neck and shoulders.
“That is… a lot shorter,” she said.
“It’s a start,” he replied, wrapping his fingers around the soft blunt ends.
She couldn’t look away from the mirror, turning her head side to side. The cut was blunt and uneven, pieces sticking out slightly where the ponytail hadn’t been perfectly aligned.
Lena let out a nervous laugh. “Okay. I definitely need a professional now.”
“Good news,” Daniel winked. “I know a place.”
–
The car slowed as Daniel pulled into the strip mall, the tires crunching lightly over old, uneven pavement. Lena stared out the window, her fingers nervously twisting the ends of her already much shorter hair.
“This is… it?” she asked.
Daniel glanced over. “Yeah.”
Lena squinted at the faded sign above the salon window. The lettering looked like it hadn’t been updated in at least twenty years. Inside, she could see a row of chairs, a long mirror, and fluorescent lights that cast everything in a slightly yellow tint.
“…It looks closed,” she said.
“It’s open,” Daniel replied. “Trust me.”
That did not reassure her.
She stepped out of the car anyway, smoothing her hair instinctively as they walked in. The moment the door opened, a strong, unmistakable scent hit her: hairspray, perm solution, something sharp and chemical that lingered in the air.
Lena hesitated just inside. The place felt frozen in time, vinyl chairs, stacks of old magazines, a humming dryer in the corner that didn’t seem to be in use.
She leaned toward Daniel. “Hey… maybe we should just go to my regular stylist. She’ll probably be able to-”
“Well, look who it is!”
The voice cut through her sentence.
From the back of the salon, a woman appeared, wiping her hands on a towel. She was slightly older, with a warm but knowing smile and a sturdy, no-nonsense presence.
“Daniel,” she said warmly, walking closer. “I haven’t seen you in ages.”
Daniel broke into a grin. “Hey, Marlene.”
Lena blinked, looking between them.
“You remember me, right?” Marlene continued. “Always sitting over there,” she pointed to a chair in the corner, “quiet as anything while your mom had her hair done. Such a good boy. Never complained.”
Lena turned to Daniel for an explanation.
“This is where my mom used to come,” he admitted, a little sheepish.
Marlene laughed. “Used to? Honey, if she could, she still would.”
Then her eyes shifted to Lena.
“And who’s this?”
“Oh, this is Lena,” Daniel said quickly. “My girlfriend.”
“Well, Lena,” Marlene said, stepping closer and giving her a quick once-over, “anyone Daniel brings in here is already family. What are we doing with your hair today?”
Lena opened her mouth, still slightly thrown. “I was actually thinking maybe just-”
“She’s been having an issue,” Daniel cut in gently. “I got her this necklace, and her hair keeps getting tangled in it, especially at the nape.”
“Mm, that happens,” Marlene said, already ushering Lena toward a chair. “Come sit.”
Before Lena could fully process it, she was seated, and a cape was snapped snugly around her neck.
“Oh, wait,” Lena said, hands lifting slightly. “I just-”
But Marlene was already combing through her hair, lifting sections and narrowing her eyes as she examined the back.
“Well,” she said after a moment, “it’s caused quite some damage”
“What?” Lena asked.
Marlene firmly pushed her head down, parting the hair at the nape and leaning in closer. “You’ve got breakage back here. See these shorter bits?” She beckoned. “Daniel, come look.”
Daniel stepped over.
Lena stiffened slightly as both of them focused on the back of her head.
“Right there,” Marlene said, pointing. “All these little uneven pieces- that’s from repeated pulling. That necklace’s been yanking strands out.”
Daniel frowned. “Yeah… I can see that.”
Lena’s stomach dropped a little. “Is it bad?”
“It’s not the end of the world,” Marlene said, “but it’s definitely damaged. You’ve been fighting with it, haven’t you?”
“…Yes,” Lena admitted.
“That’s why I helped her cut it shorter,” Daniel added. “So it wouldn’t tangle with the necklace anymore.”
Marlene straightened, running the comb through again. “It’s a good start,” she said. “But whoever did this,” she gave Daniel a quick, amused look, “left it pretty uneven. And at this length, it’ll be tangled in the necklace again in no time.”
Lena finally found her voice. “I actually don’t want it any shorter than this,” she said quickly. “It’s already barely at my chin.”
Marlene smiled reassuringly. “Of course sweetheart, I’m not going to take away your length.”
Lena relaxed, just barely.
“We’ll keep the front pieces right around here,” Marlene continued, gesturing near Lena’s chin. “But we’ll take it high off your neck and layer it in. Clean it right up.”
Lena blinked. “I’m not sure what you mean-”
But before she could finish, Marlene spun the chair smoothly and tipped it back.
“Let’s get you washed first.”
“Oh” Lena breathed out, gripping the sides as the chair reclined.
Warm water flowed over her hair, the sensation both soothing and disorienting. Marlene worked shampoo through it with quick, practiced motions, all while continuing to chat, mostly with Daniel.
“I still can’t believe you’re all grown up,” she said. “And bringing in a girlfriend? Your mother would be thrilled.”
Daniel laughed. “Yeah, she probably would.”
Lena glanced sideways as much as she could from the sink. Daniel looked… comfortable. Familiar. And, she couldn’t help noticing, just a little too interested in everything happening.
Marlene rinsed, conditioned, and wrapped Lena’s hair in a towel before guiding her back upright and returning her to the chair in front of the mirror.
“Alright,” she said, combing through the damp strands. “Let’s fix this properly.”
Lena watched her reflection carefully now, nerves creeping back in.
Marlene sectioned the hair with swift efficiency, clipping parts up and leaving the back down.
“Since we want this completely clear of the necklace,” she said, “we’re going to clean up the nape first.”
Lena’s eyes flicked to Daniel in the mirror.
This is my first story! Would love any feedback or suggestions 🙂
Great first story. Looking forward to your next one.
Wow. I loved this story the dynamics, the characters, the prose, all sublime Thank you so much for sharing.
I enjoyed this. The (relatively) gentle coercion, taking advantage of her uncertainty, the no-nonsense, take charge stylist. All lots of fun 🙂 Thanks for sharing.
Thank you so much! I’ve got a few in the works, hopefully can get them up soon
Thank you f35h, your stories are some of my favourites and actually inspired me to start writing my own!